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Before You Write a Marketing Letter or E-mail, Choose Your Audience

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Services for Real Estate Pros with Marte Cliff Copywriting

Real estate agents who don't enjoy writing often fall prey to an unworthy goal: That of trying to write an all-purpose letter - just to get it over with so they don't have to do it again.

The result, unfortunately, is usually a "no-purpose" letter when it comes to results. A letter came to me recently that underscored the problem. In reading it, I couldn't decide if the writer wanted me to list a home, buy a home, or sign up as an agent with the firm. The subjects kept bouncing around, bumping into each other at every turn. The sender really needed to write 3 different letters.

And in fact, in today's economy, to be effective he could have / should have written many more than three. Today you have sellers in many different categories: Non-distressed, pre-foreclosure with equity, and short sales. And some of them are trying to sell as FSBO's while some are disappointed because they listed their homes and the listing expired without a sale.

Add high-end, low-end, and middle-priced properties and you have a wide variety of people - all with different problems to solve.

Almost the same can be said for buyers. Some are first-timers, some move-up, some relocating, some military, some high-end, and some are investors looking for properties to repair.

I see the same lack of focus in e-mail campaigns. One agent sends me such a wide variety of letters that it's painfully obvious that he is making a failed attempt at the shotgun approach. His letters range from giving advice on first time buying to short sale information to how to get rid of my "stuff" now that I'm moving to a retirement home. One asked me if I liked married life... huh? He missed the newleywed thing by a few decades.

I could see what he was trying to do. But the end result was that he made himself look foolish - and told his prospects that he didn't know or care who they were or what they needed.

So the first step in writing to your prospective client is to decide who that client will be. And resign yourself to the fact that you simply cannot send the same letter to everyone. If you try, all you'll be able to say is "Hi, I'm here. Hire me." And if that's what you're going to say... why bother to say anything?

Then think about the problems that he or she wants to solve. What are his or her greatest concerns right now. What can you do to to solve them?

The next step is to decide what action you want your prospect to take after reading your letter. You do need to tell them!

Quite often, in the name of modesty or perhaps fear, agents forget the "call to action" - so their prospects take no action. If you want them to call, ask them to call. If you want them to visit your website, give them the address and tell them why it will benefit them to visit you. If you want them to opt-in to get your messages, ask them to do it and tell them what you're going to give them in return.

Before you actually begin to write, try to come up with someone you know who fits the profile of the customer you're writing to. If that won't work, make up a person. Give them a name and a face. See what kind of clothes they wear and the car they drive. And after you've done this, write to just that one person - just as if you were visiting over a cup of coffee.

One common mistake is trying to write to everyone in your target audience at once. Remember that only one person at a time will read your message, so it needs to sound personal. "Hey you guys!" just doesn't do the trick.

So write to that one person - about that one person. Talk about their concerns first and then tell them how you'll help them deal with those concerns.

Do your best to start every paragraph with some form of the word "you." Even if you have to come back to edit and smooth out your copy later, starting with "you" will help you avoid talking about yourself and what you think.

Remember, they don't care about you - only about the solutions you offer. If you begin your letter with "I" or "we" you might as well not write it at all, because few will read it.

Best success,

Comments(14)

Greg Nino
RE/MAX Compass - Houston, TX
Houston, Texas

Excellent post. I do a lot of snail mail and am always looking to tweek my personal flyers. This was great advice. I especially liked the "I and We" suggestion. I'm hoping my flagging for feature will help get this word out!

May 24, 2010 06:45 PM
Randy Ostrander
Lake and Lodge Realty LLC - Big Rapids, MI
Real Estate Broker, Serving Big Rapids and West Central MI

A lot of good points Marte, especially the call to action point. If you want them to do something tell them. Everyone wants to be lazy and have one generic fits all letter and that is just not realistic any more. Thanks for sharing.

May 24, 2010 07:37 PM
Marte Cliff
Marte Cliff Copywriting - Priest River, ID
Your real estate writer

Greg - thank you. I'm glad you thought this was useful to you. And thank you too, Randy. I appreciate the kind comments!

May 24, 2010 08:33 PM
Carra Riley & Declan Kenyon
Brokers Guild Cherry Creek Ltd - Westminster, CO
Helping people Transition at all ages!

Marte ~ first like the new picture!  You have a great smile!  The points you bring up here are very important.. especially asking the reader to do something.. a closing that works well for me after asking them to do something is Hope to hear from you soon.... Thanks for the great tips.

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May 24, 2010 08:40 PM
Marte Cliff
Marte Cliff Copywriting - Priest River, ID
Your real estate writer

Thanks Cara - I really didn't like that old photo... thought it made me look cranky! It really is amazing how many people hesitate to ask for anything at the close of a letter, even when it's a fundraising letter!

I actually had a client once who asked me to remove that part of her letter - she thought asking for the donation was being too pushy.

May 24, 2010 08:54 PM
Carra Riley & Declan Kenyon
Brokers Guild Cherry Creek Ltd - Westminster, CO
Helping people Transition at all ages!

Marta you are right.. I feel much closer to you seeing your pretty smile! 

May 24, 2010 10:10 PM
Loreena and Michael Yeo
3:16 team REALTY ~ Locally-owned Prosper TX Real Estate Co. - Prosper, TX
Real Estate Agents

Thanks for this, Marte. I will write with a better intention having read your advice.

I, too like your new profile photo.

May 25, 2010 12:54 AM
Marte Cliff
Marte Cliff Copywriting - Priest River, ID
Your real estate writer

Well, thank you both. I'm glad I changed it.

May 25, 2010 06:06 AM
Robert L. Brown
www.mrbrownsellsgr.com - Grand Rapids, MI
Grand Rapids Real Estate Bellabay Realty, West Mic

I ou are not specifi all it says to the prospective client is blah blah, blah blah. We've heard enough of that already in our lives.

May 27, 2010 01:30 PM
Marte Cliff
Marte Cliff Copywriting - Priest River, ID
Your real estate writer

Robert - you are so right, we've heard it all before, so we aren't listening!

Thanks for taking time to comment!

May 27, 2010 05:05 PM
Brian Madigan
RE/MAX West Realty Inc., Brokerage (Toronto) - Toronto, ON
LL.B., Broker

Marte,

That's challenging. When I tried to do ones that were more specific, I just didn't get them done. So, I'm back to the all purpose newsletter.

Brian

May 28, 2010 01:01 AM
Marte Cliff
Marte Cliff Copywriting - Priest River, ID
Your real estate writer

Brian - have you checked out the pre-written letters I offer? Each set is written to appeal to a different audience.

I wrote them for two reasons. First, because an agent contacted me who needed to start prospecting and couldn't afford letters that were custom-written just for her.

Second - because I know that unless you love to write, projects like that just don't get done. You have too many other hats to wear every day.

On the other hand - I do believe in newsletters, and in that format it is OK to touch on what you can do for different segments of your list. People know it's a newsletter. It doesn't pretend to be a letter written just to them.

May 28, 2010 06:59 AM
Todd Clark - Retired
eXp Realty LLC - Tigard, OR
Principle Broker Oregon

Your letter is like a play on Broadway, if you don't have an audience then you won't last long in the business.

Jun 20, 2010 01:51 AM
Marte Cliff
Marte Cliff Copywriting - Priest River, ID
Your real estate writer

That's right Todd - and if you have the wrong audience, it's just as useless!

Jun 20, 2010 05:49 AM