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53 Words not taken... and Herbie the Love Bug?

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Real Estate Agent with Jameson Sotheby's International Realty
Two jobs diverged in a tired career
One that was known and one that was not
And sorry, was I that I needed to switch
But job number one was waning and tired
And my back was beginning to twitch
I took the one less travelled by
And that made all the difference.
 

Okay, so this is my entry into Patricia Feager and Nick Vandekar's September Challenge.  The challenge was deceptively simple, and deceptively challenging.  Write a story using only 53 words, no more, no less.  And then in 300 words or more, tell us about your approach to the challenge and how you went about it.

The hardest part, at least for me, was to write in only 53 words.  I learned, back in college, that my problem was to learn how to write succinctly.  I tended to lean toward verbosity, and it often took many drafts to shorten my papers down to a lean few pages that my professors would accept. So submitting a draft of only 53 words was pure torture.

I reached down deep back to a short poem that resonated with me from my childhood... Robert Frost's The Road Not Taken, and I loosely based my story on that poem.

I wrote it about my struggle when I first switched from my job in the printing business, and went into real estate cold turkey.  Clearly I didn't delve very deep, but once I made the switch to this "road less travelled", I have never looked back, and honestly wish I'd found this path much sooner.

I transitioned into real estate part-time, keeping one foot in the print shop, and working 7:00-1:00 and then working in real estate from 1:00 until late in the evenings... as well as Saturday and Sunday.  My first year I held open houses each and every Sunday, except for my birthday weekend.  Those open houses introduced me to new buyers and I had a very good first year, proving to myself that I could make a living in this newfound business, and was able to shut down the original business completely at the end of that first year and jump into real estate with both feet as a full-time agent.

To paraphrase Garrett Morris "Real Estate be berry, berry good to me".

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Michael Jacobs
Pasadena, CA
Pasadena And Southern California 818.516.4393

Hello Alan - your Robert Frostesque nod to this challenge was an interesting read.  Will it lead to multiple interpretations?  

Sep 09, 2024 08:03 AM
Alan May

Not sure what you mean, but I don't anticipate multiple versions.

Sep 09, 2024 08:47 AM
Nick Vandekar, 610-203-4543
Realty ONE Group Advocates 484-237-2055 - Downingtown, PA
Selling the Main Line & Chester County

Alan May very clever, yes editing is the key, I too lean towards verbosity so it is really hard to cut stuff out. Loved the poem idea, very clever and I liked the layout and the photos as well. Thanks for entering, always enjoy your writing.

Sep 09, 2024 08:19 AM
Alan May

Writing is easy... editing is hard.

Sep 09, 2024 08:47 AM
Patricia Feager
Flower Mound, TX
Inactive/Semi Retired Real Estate Agent

Alan May - Well that was an interesting 53 Word Story! After I read your backstory, I went back to read it a second time and it all made perfect sense! When I got started I dived right in and told the Broker I wanted to be on a Team or find another job and just do Real Estate part time. Broker said, trying to work a full-time job and learn real estate is very, very difficult. Few succeed. As for joining a Team from the office, she said, skip it, you'll never succeed that way.

I realize now it had to be hard for you but so worth it to take the roads not taken. Thanks for your entry. it was very thought-provoking and excellent. 

Sep 09, 2024 11:30 AM
Alan May

It was difficult, but necessary and so worthwhile.

Sep 09, 2024 03:37 PM
Ed Silva, 203-206-0754
Mapleridge Realty, CT 203-206-0754 - Waterbury, CT
Associate Real Estate Broker

How fortunate that the path you took turned into the career and you found the platform that allowed you to share your wit with the rest of us.

Sep 09, 2024 12:12 PM
Alan May

I was fortunate, indeed.

Sep 09, 2024 03:39 PM
Mark Don McInnes, Sandpoint-Idaho
Sandpoint Realty LLC - Sandpoint, ID
North Idaho Real Estate - 208-255.6227

I find this 53 word challenge interesting.  Your's helping add to the interest level.  m

Sep 09, 2024 02:19 PM
Patricia Feager

Mark Don McInnes, Sandpoint-Idaho - I hope you will consider writing a 53 Word Story. Just be you. It's easy to do. You will be surprised how quickly you can whittle it down to just 53 words.

Sep 09, 2024 02:37 PM
Hannah Williams
HomeStarr Realty - Philadelphia, PA
Expertise NE Philadelphia & Bucks 215-820-3376

Alan May, I never cared for Open Houses. I always thought they were tire kickers. I liked For Sale by Owners - Oh, and by the way, I love your new Photo 

Sep 09, 2024 02:32 PM
Alan May

My entire first year of sales were entirely from buyers I met at Open Houses.

Sep 09, 2024 03:38 PM
Kathy Streib
Cypress, TX
Retired Home Stager/Redesign

Well done, Alan!! I love the ode to Frost's poem. I don't know if I would be considered verbose but I tend to stuff a lot of useless words into what I write.   Also love the VW Bug. 

Sep 09, 2024 06:26 PM
Alan May

I can be both... sullen and verbose, but not usually at the same time.

Sep 13, 2024 10:13 AM
Liz and Bill Spear
Transaction Alliance 513.520.5305 www.WarrenCountyOhioRealEstate.com - Mason, OH
Transaction Alliance Cincinnati & Dayton suburbs

Frost's poem is one of my favorites (not that I've ever read a lot of poetry, I lean more to sci fi and Venn diagrams).  20 years later of the dual life and I never let go of the "day" job, but as it is letting me go first, maybe I'm just ready to let go of both paths and do something different.  Hmmm...I think even my comments use more than 53 words.

Sep 09, 2024 07:20 PM
Alan May

LOL... I've been known to leave a comment longer than 53 words, too.  I'm sure, somewhere, there's a poem about a Venn diagram.

Sep 13, 2024 10:14 AM
Eileen Burns 954.483.3912
Trans State Commercial Realty Inc. - Fort Lauderdale, FL
FLorida Real Estate Connector

I am certain Patricia and Nick never meant to Torture you into participation Alan May 😂  I am with Ed on your level of wit.  Enjoyed reading your submission and you featured VW photo

Sep 13, 2024 08:42 AM
Alan May

Oh, there was no torture involved.

Sep 13, 2024 10:15 AM
Jeff Masich-Scottsdale AZ Associate Broker,MBA,GRI
HomeSmart Real Estate - Scottsdale, AZ
Arizona Homes and Land Group/ Buy or Sell

Love the Road Less Taken approach and Herbie the Lovebug.....2 of my favorites. Jeff

Sep 18, 2024 11:36 AM
Alan May

Two pretty disparate favourites.

Sep 18, 2024 03:59 PM
Debe Maxwell, CRS
Savvy + Company (704) 491-3310 - Charlotte, NC
The RIGHT CHARLOTTE REALTOR!

Well, I sent you an incredibly verbose response and it disappeared, Alan! In summary, I, for one, am so glad you left your printing career behind and have settled in a career in real estate. It's good to you because you're so good to your clients (and referral partners)! 

I found it funny that you and I both went the poem route! I told Nick Vandekar, 610-203-4543 last week that I had my post written early in the month but, didn't post it until the last day! Here it is in my Notes folder...



Thank you for participating in September's challenge - great entry!

Oct 03, 2024 08:13 PM
Alan May

I don't know if I've mentioned this before... but you are the best-est.

Oct 28, 2024 06:20 PM
Dorie Dillard Austin TX
Coldwell Banker Realty ~ 512.750.6899 - Austin, TX
NW Austin ~ Canyon Creek and Spicewood/Balcones

I was reading through the September challenges and can't believed I missed yours! As usual your post was intriguing but I learned something I didn't know about you..your printing expereience!

Oct 17, 2024 01:59 PM
Alan May

I'm always nervous when someone tells me they learned something new about me....

Oct 28, 2024 06:20 PM