Real Estate listing too Gimicky? Your take on this please!

I kind of like your wording :-)

I would venture to say that if the showings you had were in the first 2 weeks that is normal "new" activity.  If you haven't had any showings since that point then that pertains to pricing...but I bet you already know that :-)

How does the activity over the past 1.5 weeks compare to calls you're getting on similar listings in a similar price point?  Don't think it hurts to be a little unusual - or to add updated photos, etc to keep it fresh!

Wording is semi-important.  I just have a hard time with the agents who say, No Need to Preview, its perfect!.. Well, their perfect and my buyers perfect aren't always the same. :)  I really like your first wording, its descriptive and easily understood.

Linda,

I don't recall the details but a study was done last year or the year before about which words in remarks actually helped to get more showings. You might want to try googling it to see whether its still available. 

Rich

It's kind of like running an ad. Stress the benefits of the property. Maybe that is why your first comments got more results.

Wording is important. We like to tell a story about a home vs. just mentioning features. Pick out the things about your home that caused you to fall in love with it and write about those. The decrease in showings is typical after a home has been on the market for a few weeks so it may not be your wording. Selling your own home is tough so try to detach emotionally.

If there is anything I perceive to be a problem in a listing given that buyers are gold I will skip it over. No matter how well intended and fun to read youmay be giving people reason to pause. I would go back to the boring vanilla

Im trying to work the word sensual and sexy into a description just to get some attention. Agents will scratch there heads as ask "what the Heck?", General public though will say this sounds interesting (or at least I would). 

I personally found your new wording funny and different.   

Different is good. I will let you know. 

I generally run different words through my broker, just for opinion.  He does love creativity though but it is his Company and I respect that.  So it will be clean and subtle. 

I've got another campaign thats rather provactive.  I will sent you email and would love you input. 

Linda,

I think, like pictures, the wording of the narrative in the MLS listing ticket is very important.  If a buyer is reading through 10-15 listings, there should be something that makes yours stand out.  How many times can you read, 3 bedrooms, 1 1/2 baths, hardwood flooring, etc.  In this market with so many listings, what makes your isting different--why should they choose to see that one rather than all the others.  I think the obsessive/compulsive comment is right on.  Don't be too quick to judge that based on the number of showings.  I attmept to be very creative in my narratives and have had many people tell me when they call to see a property that the narrative caught their eye, caused interest.  As far as I am concerned vanilla does not work.

Rich #5 may be talking about this post from 3 years ago.The Perfect Words to Make That Home Sell

Margaret